Bolster Credibility with Investors - Avoid These Phrases in Your Business Plan

p>Remember Papa John's commercial on TV with theplan to raise capital for my business, I want it to make
slogan "Better Ingredients, Better Pizza"? Well itsan impression!
nothing more than puffery: general, non-provable, inaneHere are some other examples I've seen in business
claims. The problem is puffery is not only acceptableplans. A commercial realty company says, "We Go
it's often expected. Phrases like "the biggest," "theThe Extra Mile For Our Clients." It's puffery. How about
best," "the cheapest," and so forth are so over usedthis wonderful statement regarding a consulting firm's
most people simply ignore them.competitive advantages ..."Knowledge. Expertise.
If you're guilty of using puffery in your business plan,Determination." That's it. That's the first line! That's their
you risk filling your plan with circumstantial evidencebig "hook" to get investors to part with their money
and bold claims that won't do a thing to market yourand back the firm's business plan. They might as well
business. These frivolous claims add nothing to help annot list any competitive advantages.
investor decide whether your business venture is trulyThen there's the construction management company
any different from the other ventures they arethat claims, "We fine tune the process to create unique
evaluating. To weed out general, non-provable, inanebuilding solutions that function better, cost less, and
claims, you need a plain and simple puffery sensor.open sooner." Don't get me wrong. All of these sound
And, here it is: whenever you make a claim in yourlike fine benefits. But do you really think investors
business plan ask yourself this question, "Will investorsbelieve this? If you play the puffery game, it can cost
really believe this?"you your credibility, lengthen or even prevent you from
Let's take as an example a business plan for a cargetting funded. Avoid these kinds of statements in
dealership that included these claims:your business plan - they make no impression
- "We've got the largest selection of Ford cars andwhatsoever on potential investors.
trucks in the entire city."Now, suppose this construction management company
- "We're the largest volume Ford dealer in theexplained their "unique" process, provided cost
southwest."comparisons, and gave the actual length of time to
- "We sell more Fords than anyone else in the state."complete their last twenty projects against industry
Seasoned investors read right over this kind of hollowstandards for similar projects. And, suppose they
puffery in business plans. They're to the point that theyprovided customer testimonials to back their figures.
expect entrepreneurs and business owners seekingWould this be more believable? More convincing?
investment monies to say anything and everything inSee the best remedy for puffery is hard verifiable
an attempt to impress them.facts and evidence. The same type of facts and
In fact, one of the great pioneers of action-orientedevidence that you would want a defense attorney to
advertising, Claude Hopkins (Tested Advertisingpresent to a judge and jury on your behalf if you were
Methods: often drew this analogy to describe the useon trail and facing death row.
of general, non-provable, inane claims in advertising andOkay, I think we beat puffery to death already; it's
I've found it equally applicable to writing business plans:pretty straightforward. To summarize, let me repeat
"Platitudes and generalities roll off the humanClaude Hopkins' quote: "Platitudes and generalities roll
understanding like water off a duck's back. They makeoff the human understanding like water off a duck's
no impression whatsoever."back. They make no impression whatsoever." So use
Aren't puffery, platitudes, and generalities all the samethe puffery sensor as you write and review the
thing? You bet they are. And if you believe Mr.statements in your business plan. Simply ask yourself,
Hopkins, these kinds of statements roll off the human"Will my potential investors really believe this?" If the
understanding like water off a duck's back. They makeanswer is no, dig deeper for the evidence that will
no impression whatsoever. I don't know about you butconvince them.
if I'm spending my money and time writing a business